Saturday, April 10, 2010
Poems 26 & 27 – I DON'T GET (it) I don't get (it)...
Here are two poems that recently got rejected from The New Yorker – perhaps the workshop participants could help me figure out why! I think they're probably not elliptical enough.
I DON'T GET I DON'T GET
In your version, farther crows west
Reflections hover overt trust
The gladdest versions megamelt
And counter to the surest facet
Ounce too free
UV waivers cap the tendencies
To woo the rigor extra evidentiaries
Known in latent nonreflective valence tapes
Remaindered by the tops of faltered whorls
For fine sets
Copper scar condensed by tepid barter
Irrespective of the last dun jar
The insight is the outside with a pallor
Reminiscent of the dedicated signifier
Sever rate nigh tend
And swan...
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I don’t get it I don’t get it I don’t get it I don’t get it
Bare single-stranded DNA has a tendency to fold
House systems, in this case, reflecting hum
The terms savagery and barbarism made of so-called “jelly rubber”
Spring would be a facetious landscape capped
Several bracelet of its own obscure desires
To speak from phthalates agora
What really low-interest me surely
Rigour of historical reasoning as kinship object
Feel free to use any dedicated woods
Pole world remains cast scarcity
Verse a granitic (black) box of theatrical viewing
i dunno about poems, but here a discourses
With a stagnant suture on a flat surface
Eventually the stimulus will run its course
There is no evidence of microinvasion
I DON'T GET I DON'T GET
In your version, farther crows west
Reflections hover overt trust
The gladdest versions megamelt
And counter to the surest facet
Ounce too free
UV waivers cap the tendencies
To woo the rigor extra evidentiaries
Known in latent nonreflective valence tapes
Remaindered by the tops of faltered whorls
For fine sets
Copper scar condensed by tepid barter
Irrespective of the last dun jar
The insight is the outside with a pallor
Reminiscent of the dedicated signifier
Sever rate nigh tend
And swan...
*
I don’t get it I don’t get it I don’t get it I don’t get it
Bare single-stranded DNA has a tendency to fold
House systems, in this case, reflecting hum
The terms savagery and barbarism made of so-called “jelly rubber”
Spring would be a facetious landscape capped
Several bracelet of its own obscure desires
To speak from phthalates agora
What really low-interest me surely
Rigour of historical reasoning as kinship object
Feel free to use any dedicated woods
Pole world remains cast scarcity
Verse a granitic (black) box of theatrical viewing
i dunno about poems, but here a discourses
With a stagnant suture on a flat surface
Eventually the stimulus will run its course
There is no evidence of microinvasion
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